“Lunatic” – Chapter 2 – The Process

This post will contain all the material that I produce while working on the 2nd chapter of my comic Lunatic: from thumbnails and sketches to finished pages.  Lunatic is a wordless story, with one image-per-page.  I’ll add new material to the top of the post as I do it.

April 2-4: Oy, a new challenge.

Page 16 switches locations slightly, to the hall outside the bedroom.  I am forced to reckon with the perhaps nonsensical architecture that I’ve created.

p14 sketch 4-2

How is the house laid out?  Where would the stairs be?  What would the proportions feel like?  I know, I know… probably best to figure this stuff out before I start drawing the scene, but who can be bothered right?  So I’m retroactively trying to make sense of it, not my strong suit:

p14 architecture studies, 4-2-17

Of course maybe no one will pay attention to such things.  Or maybe they will… and LAUGH at me!!  Obsessive now:

Do I really solve the architectural question?  I don’t know, maybe I just gave up.  Anyway, it pretty much ended up looking like my earliest sketch. Here are the final pencils:

p14 v1 pencils grayscale scan

The inked line work:

p14 v1 line

In this case, it’s really all about the washes.  The rug, the wallpaper.  A little reference, and some quick studies:ve_anaglypta_sq_rd750__large81Rbb1tP2xL._SX466_p14 wallpaper studyp14 rug study

And voila!   Here it is on the drawing board:

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And scanned, with hopefully the levels adjusted well:

p14 scan gray 118-174

And after all that… My rational brain failed me around the drawing of that rail at the top of the stairs: is there room for a person to get through there?  Does the sloping-down ceiling of the roof read as perspective, making the figure look way too large?

Y’know what? I think this time I’m going to have to live with it, plus whatever little tweaks I can manage on Photoshop.

March 29-30: spreads

The next four pages are two sets of spreads. In each, the moon is on the left of the fold, girl on the right, looking at/reacting to the moon.

I didn’t grab many process moments along the way, so here are finished inks/washes for these four pages (plus a couple rejected versions):

The first moon:p 9 alt scan 1

Let’s look a little closer:p9 alt scan 2

I didn’t like the expression — kind of a banal, friendly look, and I wanted something a little more mysterious: compelling but aloof.  So, drew it over:

9 scan 5 186 midtones

Okay.  Then, the girl looking up at the moon from her bedroom window:

10 scan 3 45 -163

Then the moon does THIS:

p11 alt

And the girl:

12 scan 3 45 -163

I didn’t completely love the expression on HER face this time, so I tried it again:

12 v2 scan3 45-163

Better, and good enough!

Here they are as spreads.  As you can see, my idea is to break up the repetitive rectangle format that the images have followed so far:

8-9 spread

10-11 spread

March 24-28, sketches for the rest of the chapter.

My main concern for the next few pages is facial expressions, as it’s a back-and-forth of reactions between the Moon and the Girl.

p12 character sketch 3-24p12 character sketches 3-24p12 character sketches 3-25moon sketches 3-26-17 silly facveMoon sketches 3-28

 

Then, I also started to look past these pages to the next sequence, and sketched some for it. Sketches of the girl’s mother, who will enter the room (which morphed into sketches of the girl, older):

character sketches 3-26-17

And of the final page, in which the girl has fallen asleep against the window, as her mother enters in the background:

p15-16 sketches 3-26 ch2 p 16 sketch 3-26-17

Happy with that last one.

 

March 21-22, re-drawing page 8.

Line art, ink over pencils:

p8 process1 3-22

 

p8 process 2 3-22

p8 process 3 3-22

Adding washes:p8 process 4 3-22

p8 process 5 3-22

Scanned:

p8 v2 scan 2 touchups

That was a color scan, here it is in grayscale:

p8 v2 scan 2 touchups grayscale

The color adds a warmth to it, though, for sure.  Though, as  I said before, not sure I’ll be able to print in color.

 

 

March 20, after, a long hiatus:

I took a break from this project for a few weeks, during which I drew a short comic for the upcoming BCR anthology (so I don’t feel guilty about it).

During this time, looking at page 8, I decided it looked a little too squared-off and I wanted to spice up the composition a little, change the angle.

First, I got back into it with a few sketches of upcoming pages.  Character studies and thumbnails of a new composition for page 8: sketches 3-20

Moon face studies, and thumbnails for page 10:

sketches 3-20 2

A sketch for page 10:

Page 10 sketch 3-20

A roughed new version of page 8:

p 8 sketch 3-20

 

February 25-26, page 8:

Basically the “reverse shot” of page 7 (ohhh I hate using cinematic terms, but I don’t know how else to describe it).  Here is line art:

p8 bw scan

And, with washes:

p8 grayscal scan

February 23, page 7:

Line art:

p7 line

Washes added, first scan:p7 washes scan 2

Touchups to the washes, in 2 stages (warning: subtle differences); I used white ink to put in the cross-bars of the window frame.  I wanted to be able to draw her face as a whole, then obstruct it afterward:p7 washes touchups

p7 washes touchups2

Final (except nothing’s final, ’til the book is printed.  And even then…?).

 

 

February 22-23: page 6

Finally, we meet our heroine as a young girl… sort of.  Feet only:

p6v1 color

This is a black-and-white image of course, but this is a color scan, so it adds a tint. Which I like.  It makes me think about printing it in color, though that would be very expenseive.  Anyway, here it is converted to grayscale, as it will probably end up:

p6v1 grayscale

I really like this image, but I decided to try it another way, with the feet closer to the picture plane.  I scanned it once before finishing the shading (“state one”):

p6v2 state 1 B-darker

Here’s the color scan of it with added shading, for a more dramatic composition, and to indicate the light from the window above (even though it’s kind of nonsensical, probably, as far as how the light would really go):

p6v2 state 2

As you can see, between the first scan and the second I smudged ink on the picture (above the hem of the nightgown on the right). Here’s the image with some touchups, and converted to grayscale:

p6v2 state 2 corrected

I think this second version of the drawing is more dramatic for being a “close-up.”  But I don’t have to make a final decision until I’m actually assembling the book.

February 21st

More sketching/studying for the next 2-3 pages:

cg2 p6&7 sketches 2-21 ch2 character sketches 2-21

My idea for the moon, is that, as the girl ages, the moon’s face will change to reflect the image that a child of her age would have of a friendly or beautiful or funny face:

ch2 sketches 2-21 ch2p7 rough 1 2-21 ch2p7 rough 2-21

February 19-20.

At long last, after moving around the room looking at toys and bedclothes, the next pages will introduce the character (re-introduce, since we met her as a baby in the last chapter).  Gearing up for this with sketches and studies.

character sketches 2-19-17 character sketches 2-20-17

Still trying to find her face as depicted at the age of 8 years old or so.  Curly hair seems to be winning the day (resisting the easy fallback of a little blonde girl, which would probably be the stereotype Victorian child, I’ll make her hair black and curly, so that her ethnicity is a little more open to interpretation).

But at first, we don’t even see her face.  We see:

p6 feet studies 3 2-20-17

…feet.  Which ain’t so easy to draw, for me.  Especially from behind!

So more studies: p6 feet studies 2 2-20-17

And working toward the actual composition of the page, including a stuffed animal bearing mute witness:

p6 studies 1 2-20-17

And an actual rough of the page:

p6 feet studies 1 2-20-17

February 15-19: Do-overs.

I felt that page 2 (the “wide shot” of the bedroom), didn’t capture the shadowy, night-time feel.  I wanted to beef up the blacks, and rather than go back into the page with more ink, I bit the bullet, put a print-out of the line art onto the light-table, and re-inked the page, with heavier blacks:

p2v2 BW

I think it’s stronger than the earlier version.  I added washes.  Again, I kept putting more layers of gray wash down to get it as dark as I wanted.  But I don’t think I really know how to handle this yet: you can damage the paper and lose the ability to control the tone, and I think that’s what happened in that lighter patch above and to the right of the door.  But… working this way, I’ve got to be willing to live with accidents and imperfections.

2-2v2 scan2

One more step, to add in the wallpaper pattern:

p2v2 washes final - scan

Okay!  But now that I was into all those heavier blacks, I started to feel disatisfied with some of the other pages in this sequence… so I used the same process and redrew two of them!

p3v2 line BW

I had a good time being a little more reckless drawing this page, and I like the crazier linework.  Washes:

p3v2 washes scan

Needed a little more tones, to make the horse stand out a little better, etc:

p3v2 washes scan2

Alright!  On to the Jack in the Box.  p4v2 line art

All of this is still being inked lefty, by the way, because I am digging the unrulier line I get with that hand. Washes:

p2v2 wash 1

And a little shadier:

p2v2 final

Yeah!  I didn’t redraw page 5, but added some black:2-5 with washesB

This was all fun to do, and I like the way they turned out.

But then.

It suddenly came back to me that the reason I wanted to use gray ink washes for this sequence was to get a delicate quality, appropriate for a child’s bedroom & toys bathed in moonlight.  Now, I feel like what I’ve done has added a little bit of the “scary toy” feeling to things.  Is that just as good?  I’m not sure.  Luckily, I’ve got everything scanned (and backed up on another disc and in the cloud) at lots of different stages, so when it comes down to it, I have a lot to choose from.  That’ll be tough.

 

February 11-13: pages 4 and 5

Moving on to page 4, the Jack-in-the-Box detail of the room.  A rough sketch:

2-4 rough 1 2-10-17

Then another, to adjust the composition, moving the jack-in-the-box left so that the head is closer to the center of the page and you can see more of the books:

2-4 rough 2-11-17

Work in progress on the drawing table, penciled and inked. With one nice ink drop on the bed-post, oh, well.

process photo p4 inked

Here is the line-art with pencils erased:4 line bmp

The ink washes go on in layers, from light to dark.  Here’s the first layer, an overall light gray:

p4 ink wash layer 1

Moving faster now, I didn’t resort to doing ink washes on separate pages via light-box (because I was satisfied with the way they turned out applied directly to the original.) I moved back and forth between pages 4 & 5, as I waited for the layers of ink wash to dry.  Here’s page 4 on the drawing table:

process photo p5

Page 5 line art scanned:

2-5 line art bmp

 

And here is page 5 with all the ink washes applied:

2-4 with washes FLAT

And pag4  with final ink washes:

2-5 with washes FLAT

 

February 10-13:  Page 3

After the wide shot of the room, three pages of details, moving around the room. Bear with me for all these versions.  It’s f***ing endless.  Here’s a photo of the line art, inked, on the drawing table:
2-3 pencils photo

Scan of the line art:3 line bmp

Gray wash process.  First an overall light gray (which will serve as the “white” of the page once other wash layers are applied) (i premixed 3 different tones of ink wash in separate jars):

wash layer 1

Next, added another layer to darken in the figure of the horse.  I also wanted the horse to have spots that are lighter than its overall tone, so I used masking fluid to create those.  Actually I didn’t particularly care if the spots were lighter, I just liked using the masking fluid:

wash layer 2

Finally, more wash to darken everything, and peeled off the dried masking fluid:

wash layer 3

Here it is, scanned:

2-3 washes 1

To be honest, I can’t even remember what it was that disatisfied me about the above version.  Probably again, that it’s a little too pale and doesn’t feel like a dark room at night time.  At any rate, I went through the same process I did on the previous page, using a light box to create new wash layers on separate pages:3 background wash tones3 objects wash tone3 shadows wash

Stack ’em in transparent layers over the scan of the line art, and voila:

3 with washes FLAT

Well, I do find this richer and stronger.  I even the white gaps in the washes on the horse, resulting from imprecisions in my light-boxed layers.  So I’m done with the page.  Or am I?  Don’t kid yourself.

 

February 6-9: Page 2, many stages.

Rough pencils:

p2 sketch 2-6

 

Final pencils:2-2 pencils

Pencils inked:

2-2 pencils inked photo

Line art inks:2-2 line

With ink washes (applied directly to page):
2-2v1 scan

(note on above: I wasn’t satisfied with the washes, because I think there’s too much light. This is supposed to be a room at night, dark, with a diagonal section lit by moonlight thru the window).

So I went back in to add more atmosphere with washes:
2-2v2 adj

…but I felt I’d only muddied things up.  Irretrievably.  Luckily, I’d scanned the line art, so I tried a different method, applying ink washes to separate pages, using a light table over a print out of the line art.

Here is the ink wash for the overall lighting of the room:

tones

Then, digitally combined with the line art:2-2 wash layer 1

Another layer of ink washes, for specific shadows:

shadows

Added digitally:

2-2 wash layer 2

And finally, a separate layer for the wallpaper pattern:wallpaper

Here is the line art combined in Photoshop with the three layers of inkwash:

2-2 w washes

This method gives me a lot of flexibility.  Too much flexibility, in fact, as I can try so many combinations.  Here, for instance, is the scan with the first layer of inkwash applied to the page (that is, the fifth image from the top for this date’s entry), combined with just the darkened ceiling from that separate layer of inkwash, four images up from here.

2-2v1 digital shading touchupsIf you’re confused, you see why I may be overdoing the “flexibility.”  But I push on…  Stay tuned.

February 3: Page 1, finally.

The exciting moment.  Pre-season is over.  Now, it counts. Pencil to paper, then ink… the final page.

Oh, I lied.  First there was a false start: I penciled, but realized I hadn’t gotten the composition exactly right.  Not a dramatic-enough angle.

2-1 false start

Rather than erase,  I started over.  Got the composition right.  Here is an in-progress shot with just the line art.  Again, penciled by right hand, inked with left:

2-1 line art photo

And the finished page:

2-1gray

I was painstaking with applying the ink washes, using several “coats, ” like glazing in painting, letting each coat dry, then applying another, to get the tonalities where I wanted them.

February 2: ink sketch for page 1

I did one final pencil sketch, then another version in ink and inkwash… since that’s the media I’ll be using for this chapter, and I want to get used to it:

p1 sketch 2 - 2-2-17

p1 inkwash sketch 2-2-17

I penciled this with my right hand, and inked with my left. I kind of like the wiggly lines my left hand makes.  Overall I’m happy with the quality of the drawing, but I screwed up the composition… didn’t get enough of a dramatic angle.

 

January 31-Feb 1: page sketches

I started doing more refined pencil sketches for the first two pages of the chapter.   Page 1 is the “establishing shot” of the building in which the scene takes place: p1 sketch 1 2-1-17

What bothers me about this is that it’s too similiar to the first page of the previous chapter, another look down a block of rowhouses.  I tried to vary the architecture, but still.

Re-thumbnailed the page, changing the angle and making it closer to the window of the girl’s room (plus a few more rocking-horse doodles):p1 etc sketch 2-3-17

Okay, that looks better. Then, on to page 2, A thumbnail:

p2 sketch 1-31-17

And a full-sized rough sketch:

p2 sketch 2-1-17

January 30-31:  Jacks-in-the-box

Another toy to be featured in the first pages of the chapter (as we “move in” on details of the bedroom).  Here’s some reference:jack in the box composite

Some scribbly sketches:

jack in the box sketches 1-30-17 1

Thinking that I want to do something different: still with a classic Jack-in-the-Box feel, but with a little variation.  It popped into my head to do a Cossack Jack-in-the-Box:

jack in the box sktches 2 1-30-17

Rocking Horses 1-28 1 cossack jack in the box 1cossack ink sketchjack in the box and toysjack in the box and toys DETAIL

Again, I don’t need to nail it down at this point, just get a basic idea of what it would look like, and go back to it fresh when I reach that page.   (afterwards I googled “Cossack Jack in the box” and there aren’t any images of one, so maybe I’m being original!)

January 27-28, 2017: Toy-time

Studies for the rocking horse in the bedroom scene. Here are some of my reference photos (there are lots more, I’m kind of obsessive about gathering reference):

ROCKING HORSE composite

Rocking Horses 1-27 A

The thing is, a lot of those Victorian rocking horses are very naturalistic — but if I draw a naturalistic rocking horse, it won’t look any different than if I was just drawing a horse.  So I will go for a more stylized design:

Rocking Horses 1-27

 

Rocking Horses 1-28 1

 

Rocking horse 1-28

I like this last one (inked with left hand).  I’ll stop now, so I don’t get stale on rocking horses before it’s time to draw the actual page.

 

 

 

January 26, 2017: sketches, ink wash

Now that the sequence is thumbnailed, I went to work on more refined sketches of the characters.  Since I plan to draw this chapter using ink and wash, I started working with that medium.

sketches 1-26-17 1sketches 1-26-17 2sketches 1-26-17 3 ‘(Note: the above is just a doodle of the character when she’s older, though the hair is wrong, not a sketch for ch. 2)sketches 1-26-17 4

Drawn with left hand; the reaction of the mother on entering on the final page of the chapter.  This was going to be a maid, but I decided to make it her mother, again to play down the idea that she’s wealthy.  There’s no reason she shouldn’t be a wealthy character, but there’s no reason she should either.  So even though it might be more fun to draw a big mansion (and easier to draw a maid’s uniform than figure out what a Victorian-era mother would be wearing in the early morning), I don’t want this story to be about the fantasy of wealth. So mom gets the part.

sketches 1-26-17 5

January 25, 2017: more detailed thumbnails; architectural decision sketches

I drew larger thumbnails, so that I could see more detail and get a better idea of the flow from image to image:

Thumbnails 1-25 1Thumbnails 1-25 2Thumbnails 1-25 3Thumbnails 1-25 4

 

One question I’m having is the depiction of the house.  I started drawing a rather large Victorian stand-alone house. I wanted to differentiate this location from the row-houses in chapter one.  But I don’t really like the way that defines the character as wealthy.  I’d rather have her be middle-class, which would suggest that she and her family live in a more modest row house (since they’re urban). So I sketched a block of row houses with hopefully enough architectural differences from the opening scene to make clear we’re not in the same exact location:

sketches 1-25-17

Sorry about the bleed-through from another sketch (which I drew with brush pen, the following day).

January 24, 2017: Rough thumbnails, reference material and sketch for bedroom interior.

Thumbnails:

Thumbnails 1-24-17 1

Thumbnails 1-24-17 2

 

Scribbly, yes, but I understand them.  At this point, I am laying the chapter out at 15 pages.  For comparison, here’s the thumbnails for this sequence from way back when i first “wrote” the story, a couple of years ago (the character was a boy, then):

first thumbnails 2

Back to the present-day, and here’s some sketching of the location (interior) for this scene, the girl’s bedroom:Bedroom interior sketch 1 1-24-17

Here is some of the reference images I downloaded for this setting:

 

Undated (2016)

Here’s a  couple pages of doodles from some time back, not sure when.  On the top page, I’ve circled the ones that relate to Lunatic.

I found the bottom page in a pile of papers, I’d forgotten about those drawings.  It was kind of an important find, because in the intervening months, without realizing it, I’d changed the character’s hair from dark to blonde.  And I think I’m changing it back to dark thanks to finding those sketches.

early sketches 2

 

Lunatic sketches

“Hoshizora ni uta e ba” by Masai Akiyosha

A 1950s shojo manga I bought online from a Japanese auction site, a relic of the era of kashihon, inexpensive rental libraries through which many manga books were distributed in impoverished, post-war Japan..   “Hoshizora ni uta e ba (If You Sing to the Starry Sky”) by Masai Akiyosha. Here are select pages, and my  non-Japanese-reading commentary/ guesses at what’s going on.   First, the cover and page one of the story.

hoshizora-ni-uta-e-ba-cover

The cover appears to be by a different artist than the interior.  Perhaps 勝山ひろし – KATSUYAMA Hiroshi?

masai-akiyoshi-hoshizora-ni-uta-e-ba-1

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BOOK REPORT: “Juliette: les fantômes reviennent au printemps” by Camille Jourdy

IMG_20170210_111255169Juliette: les fantômes reviennent au printemps (Juliette: the ghosts return in spring) is a 240-page French graphic novel, published by Actes Sud in 2016.  I don’t know much about Camille Jourdy : she’s done a lot of children’s books, and had a previous series of bd albums, Rosalie Blum, which I guess was successful, since it was adapted as a film as well.Continue reading →

“Lunatic” process 1/23/17: The Last Baby

8-2 grayscale

As I said, I wasn’t satisfied with the baby’s expression on page 8, so I drew it over.  I could have just redrawn the face and paste it in on Photoshop, but I really want the pages to be presentable as originals as well.

Anyway, this marks the end of the first chapter of “Lunatic,” in which the main character is an infant. I’ll now move on to Chapter 2, which will start with a lot of thumbnails and studies…

“Lunatic” process progress – 1/19/17

Okay, enough prep… ready to start on those last two pages of the chapter.

Actually, one more sketch:baby reach 1-19-17

…and NOW ready to go.  I will do the two-page sequence, of baby seeing the moon / baby reaching for it. Pencil, conte crayon and India ink, with white acrylic for corrections: Drew the second page first (page 9, in the current layout), because it was the one I was more nervous about getting right:9-1 FLAT

…and I think I did get it right.   I wanted them to be exactly alike in terms of composition, so I used the light table to lightly outline, then took it off the light box and went ahead with conte crayon and ink on page 8:

8-1 FLAT

I like the picture, in and of itself… but I don’t think I got the expression right.  The transition from 8 to 9 is to much.  The first page should show her beginning to react to what she’s seeing, leading in to the gesture on the next page.

“Lunatic” Process: 1/11-1/17/17

I’ve fallen off the “post every day” wagon this week, so here’s the work I did for this story over several days:

Continuing to work on the moon images for this sequence, as the clouds move over it, and the face is revealed.  I had penciled the final image (page 7, if the current layout holds), but I went back to work out the previous two (mostly so that I could have the cloud shapes consistent).  These are all done with black, white and gray acrylic paint, and conte crayon for the clouds.  A first try at page 5:

5-1 SCAN 1

I decided to reject this, because I wanted more clouds in the frame.  Next try:

5-2 SCAN 1

This (above) is after touch-ups in Photoshop, to darken the black and flatten out the texture of the black acrylic, as well as the warps in the page, which showed up clearly in the scan (as you can see in the top image).

Here’s the next in the sequence, page 6:
6-1

I decided that the eye and smile were too pronounced here (spoiling the impact of the “reveal” on the next page.  So I went back in with white acrylic and obscured them a bit:

6-1A

With these done, I went back to ink the final image of the sequence:

7-1 scan 1 flat

Over the next few days (the holiday weekend), I only managed a couple scribbled sketches.  Since I decided to draw the baby reaching for the moon (literally), after the face appears, I had a new idea for a final page of the sequence, baby’s point-of-view with her hand in the foreground.  Here is scribble of it, with some scribbled thumbnails next to it as a bonus:panel 10 alt sketch

I’m thinking that image might work better without the architecture between hand and moon, just black.

Then, unable to sleep one night, I did a few more sketches, some in preparation for finishing up this baby/moon scene, others in anticipation of the next scene to come.  This is all quick and dirty, but I’m being a stickler for completism — and also, these little scribbly sketches are an important part of the process.  So:

1-17-17 insomnia sketchs

“Lunatic” process, 1-10-17

Preparing to draw what (I think) will be page 7.  I don’t really know for sure how the pages will be ordered: though I have a plan, it might very well not hold. Since it’s one image per page, I think there will be a process much like film editing, where I have the “shots” and can play with different ways of ordering them.

Anyway, I felt a little uncertain of some of the perspective (though I’ve drawn this same scene several times by now), so I did a free-hand perspective sketch of the location:

1-10-17 building sketch reduced

The part I’m finding tricky for some reason are those brick things that slant down the roof from each chimney.  But I think I have it, more or less, so here is the penciled drawing for page 7:

p7 v1 pencils

That’s all, folks (for today)!

“Lunatic” process, 1-9-17: More moons

Still playing catch-up, in a way, after the 3 month layoff.  I’ve done pages of moon studies before.  But now I am a little more purposeful, because these studies are for pages I am actually about to draw: the gradual appearance of the face in the moon.  This page of sketches is not in the correct sequence.  I also took the opportunity to use black acrylic instead of India ink for the night sky.  I think I like the texture of it.

moon-clouds-studies-1-9-17Here they are rearranged into a rough sequence (and I copied and pasted the clouds in, where necessary for the flow of it:)moon-cloud-sequence

It won’t be a strip like that in the final — though looking at it makes me consider whether it should be.  I’ll draw the final versions now, taking a little more care with the placement of the clouds, and making their shapes more consistent.  And lighten up those craters a bit, next pass.  Of

“Lunatic” process – 1-7-17 – Page 4, again.

Completed the new version of page 4, with a more dramatic angle to the roof, and a bigger moon for more “presence” (the page, and the story, are about the moon, not the building, after all).   I used acrylic paint for the building and the moon, conte crayon for the clouds, and India ink for the sky.  Here it is, the raw scan above, and with photoshop touchups below:
p4-v2-scan

In Photoshop I darkened the black of the sky, then added more contrast in the roof, and lightened up the craters in the moon a bit.  It ended up looking like this:

p4-v2

Here, by the way (below), is the earlier version of the page, for compare and contrast. An improvement, I’m pretty sure (though I kind of like the big cloud in the older version better than in the new.  Oh well.)

First version
First version